Writing

Arguments: Introductions: WALT: write an effective introduction to an argument WILF:
 * non-biased language (you don't give your opinion)
 * language of debates (e.g. it is argued that, there is contention over, etc)
 * formal language (e.g. 'however', instead of 'but')
 * facts, statistics, scenarios or evidence to give rise to an issue
 * 3rd person 'you' are not part of it, neither am 'I'
 * avoid repetition of words, try to vary your choice

Was Beijing a good selection of host cities for the 2008 Olympic Games?
Dominique's completed and annotated argument:

Examples of introductions written by Room 7 students. How could these introdcutions be improved?**
 * What have these people done well?


 * 1) When a city with a poor human rights history gains the honour of hosting the Olympic Games, the world focuses not only on the excitement of the events, the opening ceremony and the medals their country may bring home, but also on how people have been treated in the past and most recently in preparation for the games. Human rights organisations and activists have been spotlighted in the media for their campaigns against China's treatment of its people and have raised the question, was Beijing a responsible choice for a host city of the Olympic Games?
 * 2) As we all know Beijing is trying very hard to cut down on the pollution for the Olympic Games. On the other hand the townspeople disagree of this as they have not been treated how they should.
 * 3) For 2008 olympic games, they have been held in Beijing (China) it was first decided in 2005 from the olympic committee. but the people have started to doubt it because of the bad pollution. Are these people really right?
 * 4) In order to be chosen by the International Olympic Committee to host the legendary Olympic Games, a city must be internationally claimed as a significant place. China, which holds over half of the world's population, seems the obvious choice to uphold this honour. Though, much controversy has been raised, and opinions voiced over whether such a glory should be presented to such a blemished and troubled city.
 * 5) For centuries the Olympic Games have taken place in cities all around the world. This year 2008 they are being held in Beijing, China after this was decided by the International Olympic Committee. However, there has been many considerable debates over whether this was a good choice of venue.
 * 6) Beijing, China has been selected by the International Olympic Committee to be the city to held the Olympic Games in 2008. However, recent articles in the press about Beijing, China state that the treatment of human in China is very poor. There has been many considerable debates over whether this was a good choice of venue.
 * 7) For months there has been much controversy over should Beijing China be worthy of hosting the Olympic Games most of the controversy is over there human rights history. People all over the world were amazed to see Beijing were chosen to host 2008 Olympic Games.
 * 8) The fact that the 2008 Olympic games were chosen to be held in Beijing has caused arguments. It is claimed from people that Beijing wasn't a great place to hold the games but whats so bad about this city?
 * 9) As host to over half the world's population China seemed the obvious choice to play host to the world's most internationally known athletic competition, though was this the best choice? Many opinions have benn voiced such a legendary event being held in such a troubled city.